“There is a thin line between confidence and arrogance. It’s called humility.” (Unknown)
It was Hillary Clinton’s lack of humbleness that struck me yesterday morning as the news kept playing that clip of her accepting her nomination and saying this: “I can’t believe we just put the biggest crack in that glass ceiling yet!” She was actually referencing back to something she said in 2008 when she conceded the nomination to Obama: "Although we weren't able to shatter that highest, hardest glass ceiling this time, thanks to you, it's got about 18 million cracks in it."
Hillary is suffering for her lack of warmth and the reality that common people do not find her ‘relatable’. She had a moment there, in her scripted persona, to demonstrate a little warmth. If I were her speechwriter, I would have written something more like this:
“Wow. You honor me. I dreamed of being President as a little girl and I have to first thank my parents (Hillary does have some, right?) for letting me know there was no reason I couldn’t be President and then for providing me with a good education until I could fly on my own. I know my life has been privileged; I try never to take the opportunities I had for granted. Second, I’m grateful for all the men in positions of authority early in my career who were already long ago developing and supporting women. It’s exciting to have done something of historical significance but I hope someday my impact as your next President will be what we really talk about.”
“We just put the biggest crack in that glass ceiling” just came out sounding arrogant to me…like, I won! I won! It was just a missed opportunity. But maybe her writers knew she couldn’t pull off something more humble.
In case you’re wondering how I’d re-write Trump… well, maybe another day. Mostly he needs to just stop talking.
UPDATE: 10:15am
I wrote that blog last night. Seems I'm not the only person wanting to speechwrite for Hillary. Read this opinion piece from the USAToday that was in the morning paper. Very good. Similar in tone and objective.
It was Hillary Clinton’s lack of humbleness that struck me yesterday morning as the news kept playing that clip of her accepting her nomination and saying this: “I can’t believe we just put the biggest crack in that glass ceiling yet!” She was actually referencing back to something she said in 2008 when she conceded the nomination to Obama: "Although we weren't able to shatter that highest, hardest glass ceiling this time, thanks to you, it's got about 18 million cracks in it."
Hillary is suffering for her lack of warmth and the reality that common people do not find her ‘relatable’. She had a moment there, in her scripted persona, to demonstrate a little warmth. If I were her speechwriter, I would have written something more like this:
“Wow. You honor me. I dreamed of being President as a little girl and I have to first thank my parents (Hillary does have some, right?) for letting me know there was no reason I couldn’t be President and then for providing me with a good education until I could fly on my own. I know my life has been privileged; I try never to take the opportunities I had for granted. Second, I’m grateful for all the men in positions of authority early in my career who were already long ago developing and supporting women. It’s exciting to have done something of historical significance but I hope someday my impact as your next President will be what we really talk about.”
“We just put the biggest crack in that glass ceiling” just came out sounding arrogant to me…like, I won! I won! It was just a missed opportunity. But maybe her writers knew she couldn’t pull off something more humble.
In case you’re wondering how I’d re-write Trump… well, maybe another day. Mostly he needs to just stop talking.
UPDATE: 10:15am
I wrote that blog last night. Seems I'm not the only person wanting to speechwrite for Hillary. Read this opinion piece from the USAToday that was in the morning paper. Very good. Similar in tone and objective.